Really good story. I did not realize reading it that it was 100 words long exactly or that the hard c was used to provided to create a poetic atmosphere, so I'm very glad you included that information. I did think the beginning was poetic, so you did accomplish your goal there. And yes, the ending was pretty jarring. When you included the line about the whimper I thought that he was talking to a dog, then a human seemed more likely. Dog or human?? Does it really matter?? It's still pretty dark either way. Great job!
Very good story, Brandon. Leaves you wondering. 💕
Thanks, Sue!
Really good story. I did not realize reading it that it was 100 words long exactly or that the hard c was used to provided to create a poetic atmosphere, so I'm very glad you included that information. I did think the beginning was poetic, so you did accomplish your goal there. And yes, the ending was pretty jarring. When you included the line about the whimper I thought that he was talking to a dog, then a human seemed more likely. Dog or human?? Does it really matter?? It's still pretty dark either way. Great job!
I was thinking human, but it very well could've been a dog. You're right, it probably doesn't matter. Dark either way. At least it's fiction! Lol